6.10.14

A Poem to Start the Week

 


Gee, You're so Beautiful It's Starting to Rain
by Richard Brautigan

Oh, Marcia,
I want your long blonde beauty
to be taught in high school,
so kids will learn that God
lives like music in the skin
and sounds like a sunshine harpsichord.
I want high school report cards
     to look like this:

Playing with Gentle Glass Things
     A

Computer Magic
     A

Writing Letters to Those You Love
     A

Finding out about Fish
     A

Marcia’s Long Blonde Beauty
     A+!


from The Pill Versus the Springhill Mine Disaster, 1968
Houghton Mifflin Company, New York, NY


On Topic Sentences and Reading, on Inspiration and Bluebirds



Reading is probably the best way to learn to write, not only because it can provide you with new words and expressions but also because it expands your imagination and your inspiration. At least, this is what happens to me when I read the literary works I like most. I can feel I have access to a new universe, full of images and sensations that connect to my inner self and help me fly a little.

This year, we are supposed to learn to write essays (basic stuff: descriptions, letters, opinions, etc.) but learning to write anything without the magic of literature seems senseless to me. As far as I see it, fiction and poetry are not so distant from (scientific and academic) essays. Have a look at the article linked here if you do not agree with me. Even the most serious scholars need a touch of literature at some point of their careers. A recent example: some Swedish scientists "have been amusing one another by seeing who can conceal the most Bob Dylan lyrics in their scholarly articles"

As I said in class last week, when writing an essay - as well as when writing fiction - you need at least one stunning sentence. We call that sentence a "topic sentence". The topic sentence usually conveys the main idea of the paragraph/article, so it should always be able to attract the reader's attention. For the topic sentence to be interesting, you need to narrow your topic as much as you can, and try to SAY something (as original as you can) that creates a lot of expectation on your reader. It means you need to "claim" something and show it. Then, to make your readers believe what you say, you need to support your topic sentence through "supporting sentences". Three basic techniques we can use to develop such sentences are: details, explanations and examples. (I am not going to bore you too much with this. Just read the Presentation I screened in class.) Finally, you should close your paragraph/text with a "concluding sentence". This final sentence repeats or insists on the main idea, but using other words. This is something you can find in many texts. Let's read a poem by Charles Bukowski to make this point clear. (You can listen to it while reading if you click here.)


BLUEBIRD

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say, stay in there, I'm not going
to let anybody see
you.

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I pour whiskey on him and inhale
cigarette smoke
and the whores and the bartenders
and the grocery clerks
never know that
he's
in there.

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him,
I say,
stay down, do you want to mess
me up?
you want to screw up the
works?
you want to blow my book sales in
Europe?

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too clever, I only let him out
at night sometimes
when everybody's asleep.
I say, I know that you're there,
so don't be sad.

then I put him back,
but he's singing a little
in there, I haven't quite let him
die
and we sleep together like
that
with our
secret pact
and it's nice enough to
make a man
weep, but I don't
weep, do
you?

Charles Bukowski
(The Last Night of the Earth Poems, 1992)


The first lines in Bukowski's poem sound like a "topic sentence":

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too tough for him...

These lines contain a metaphor that contains the main idea of the poem: "there's something beautiful, sensitive and fragile in my heart but I can't show it, I am a tough guy". The following stanzas repeat this idea but not in a facile (= simplistic) way. Bukowski provides details, explanations, examples (he says he pours whiskey on the bird, he says he is too tough, and only let the bird out sometimes...) - these are his supporting sentences. Finally, he concludes:

...it's nice enough to
make a man
weep, but I don't
weep, do
you? 

 Again, Bukowski insists on what he said at the beginning of the poem: "there's something nice here but I am too tough to show it", "I don't cry, man". However, and this is the beauty of the poem, it is impossible not to notice, when reading, that Bukowski does have something fragile inside. He says he does not weep, but we know he feels something important deep inside. We know there are "birds" inside Bukowski, even though they are hidden because of a "secret pact".

To sum up, reading (good literature) might help you to build good topic sentences, as well as to develop supporting and concluding sentences. My piece of advice is that you read whatever you find interesting and try to remember the words in English. Remember that translating from Spanish is not a good idea. So explore, research, try and try again, fail and fail better, as advised by the great writer Samuel Beckett. Charles Bukowski himself had to undergo a lot of criticism, being subject to countless misadventures before becoming recognised as an author. But such misadventures are part of any learning process, aren't they?

 Picture by Dara Scully, Your Branches/My Bones
***


If you feel like reading something and you do not know what, here you are a couple of amazing books:

ON THE ROAD by Jack Kerouac (we read an extract in class, remember?)

THE PEOPLE LOOK LIKE FLOWERS AT LAST by Charles Bukowski


 Enjoy!!












30.9.14

Making Lists: Hand in Hand with Raymond Carver

Making lists is a way of getting over the blank page that sometimes, when used cleverly, can result in wonderful texts. Yesterday we performed a collective experiment in class. Today, when exploring your blogs, I discovered some hidden treasures derived from that experiment. Now it is "my turn". I have written a poem that includes some of the lines you spoke in class. I hope you like it. Otherwise, I invite you to write a different text.


Fear of the dark,

which is fear of going blind.

Fear of failure to achieve my dreams,

and fear of disappointing those I love.

Fear of not being loved back.

Fear of destruction.

Fear of heights and spiders,

fear of viruses

and death.

Fear of murderers,

fear of people around.

Fear of being alone,
       -or rather, fear of being left alone.
Fear of the time passing too fast.

Fear of losing my memory.

Fear of missing your call.

Fear of suffering.

Fear of fears.

Fear of making lists.

That is to say:

fear of wasting my time.


P.S: If you feel like reading Raymond Carver's poem again, click here.

28.9.14

New bloggers, great surprises

Dear students,

I have already started a "Blog List"(have a look!) and visited some of your blogs. I must say I feel astonished (in a positive way) because some of you are amazingly talented. Your strenghts are: imagination, honesty, and a solid grasp of things I've never heard of. Now that I got to know you a little, I am sure I am going to learn a lot from you. Hopefully, you will also learn something from this experience, so let's move on: everybody is welcome to explore and start following each other. All the blogs will be linked and available for you this week, pay attention because new surprises are coming.

Remember, all you need is to be self-confident and write (and read too, but we will be talking about this in class very soon).

Yes, you can.

All my best,
reme


24.9.14

Let's start!

Dear students,

most of you have already started a blog. I am very happy because I have been browsing the web and found interesting stuff. Your blogs look quite creative (some of the titles you have chosen are amazing), and I am sure we are going to learn a lot.

For those of you who have had some problems with blogspot, there is a tutorial available on SAKAI (our official site at www.um.es, it is already active!). Please, have a look and do not doubt to contact me if you need any extra help. Moreover, if, for any reason, you detest blogspot, you are welcome to start a blog on any other site (wordpress, for example). Using blogspot might be more useful because it will be easier to follow each other here.

So... You can start writing now. I am really looking forward to reading you. I know that writing might be hard sometimes, especially in the beginning. Do not panick, you will not be alone in your learning process. You have lots of mates and, of course, you can count on me.

All my best,

r





14.9.14

TEXTBOOK

Dear students,

one of the books we will be using this year is this one:



 Feeling curious? Look inside Google Books

HOW TO FIND IT:






Of course, your teacher will catch your attention with much more extra material, including other books, videos, powerpoint presentations and links.

Enjoy the reading,

reme





WELCOME TO PRÁCTICAS DE REDACCIÓN

Dear Students,

welcome to the University of Murcia and to PRÁCTICAS DE REDACCIÓN EN INGLÉS. I have created this blog to help you develop your writing skills. Creativity, accuracy, and the ability to express your own ideas will be required, from now on,  to complete your degree in Estudios Ingleses.

What's the nex step? That's quite easy: just enter your e-mail address in the box on the right, "Suscribe and Follow by Email", to start receiving my newsletters in your e-mail account. This way I will keep you informed.

Besides, you will be expected to create your own blog and update it during the course, so pay attention to what is explained in class this week, please.

Best regards and KEEP ON WRITING!

reme

rperni@um.es

P.S. Are you curious about the program we are following this year? Just have a look below.